seraphitus ([info]seraphitus) wrote,
@ 2007-04-03 17:07:00
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[drabble] Sen to Chihiro: The Sea Calls Me
This is for [info]yokozuki, who requested Sen to Chihiro no Kamikakushi drabble-fare. XD

Spirited Away [Sen to Chihiro no Kamikakushi]
Chihiro, 595 words

On her fifteenth birthday, Chihiro's father took her to the beach. They went by train, as it was too far for him to justify spending the gas, and her mother packed shrimp and mayonnaise sandwiches to take along. Chihiro had never cared for mayonnaise, but her mother was working full time as a secretary at some big company an hour away, and couldn't be trusted to remember such things.

The weather forecast called for rain. When they got to the beach, it was cloudy, but at least it was not packed with screaming crowds, bratty children running around in next to nothing, throwing sand. Her father unfolded beach blankets while Chihiro and her mother staked out a spot on the sand and spread out their small picnic lunch. They ate mostly in silence, though it was a good silence, one that spoke of quiet contentment over the sound of waves on the shore.

At the end of the pier by the parking lot, there was a small, red flag waving in the breeze. "To warn people about the sharks," her father said, but Chihiro had never heard of any sharks. "Don't go swimming down there. It's dangerous."

She walked down to investigate anyway, after her parents had fallen asleep. The flag was much larger than it had looked from their picnic area. The sun came out from behind the clouds for a moment, warming the wood, and she took a careful seat on the creaking pier, swinging her legs just above the surface of the water.

She could have sworn for a second as she looked down, that something moved there. She dismissed it as just the movement of the water out of the corner of her eye, but there was a splashing from behind her, like someone dropping rocks in the water. Chihiro jerked her legs out of the water, spinning around, but there was no one there.

From far away, she heard the sound of a train's whistle. Something rustled about her head, like the flutter of wings, and she paused, poised to turn but almost afraid to, and then she realized it was just the red flag snapping in the wind.

The train's horn came again, and she closed her eyes, stretched her arms out and began to walk in the direction of the sound of water. One foot, then the other, small, timid strides that still did not falter. When her left foot met not wood, but air, she let herself fall in.

Water closed above her head. The air leave her lungs in a whoosh, but she felt curiously alive. When she opened her eyes, the water was filled with birds, sunlight shimmering on their scaled wings. She reached out one hand to them, but they scattered, leaving glimmering bubbles in their wake. She was not afraid when her vision began to black at the edges and her lungs gasped for air and found none. The fish-birds flickered back into sight, and she gave a sigh and closed her eyes as their cold feathers brushed her skin.

Who are you? she thought, and the feathers seemed to say, don't be afraid.

When she opened her eyes again, she saw the cloudy sky and the frayed edge of their old beach umbrella above her, the shadow of her father on the other side packing up the cooler. "It's going to rain, Chihiro," he said. "We'd better start heading back."

She sat up. Her clothes were dry. The pier's familiar wooden shape loomed in the distance, but the red flag was gone.



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[info]yokozuki
2007-04-05 08:59 pm UTC (link)
O_O

;_________;



!!!

(;_____________;)

and couldn't be trusted to remember such things. - I had to pause a while over that, over the feeling. You've so precisely captured the mother's character with so little really said, and their relationship...
after her parents had fallen asleep.
The next paragraph, the overlapping of layers... *_*
The train whistle, like the flutter of wings --when my chest got tight and eyes and spine started to prickle a bit.
Overlapping again... so good... small, timid strides that still did not falter. --where I started to cry. Um. ^_^b That is IT. Precisely. That's the whole thing about Chihiro, right there, in that little image. ;___________; I LOVE YOU, GER. I FUCKING LOVE YOU, MAN, HOLY SHIT.

When she opened her eyes again, she saw the cloudy sky and the frayed edge of their old beach umbrella above her,
"It's going to rain, Chihiro," --Beginning there and growing through the rest of his line, in an almost-shock kind of way - Chillllls... chilllls... kind of... not the normal chills kind of chills but THE SEN TO CHIHIRO KIND OF CHILLLLLS... you know what I mean - and - the thing is -

*reads last little para*

*gets chills-shaky in the heart and teary as all fuck from the hollow and piercingness at once*

The thing is that you DO clearly know and get the same feeling from the movie and are FUCKING BRILLIANT. Because. WOW. ;_; Wow.

Thank you so much for writing this.

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[info]darcenciel
2007-04-06 01:17 am UTC (link)
*returns the love*

I find it odd, because Sen to Chihiro is my favorite movie in the whole entire world, yet I've never written anything for it. I think it's because I am never sure of what to say to such a brilliant piece of work. Most people I know find Mononoke Hime or some of his older movies, like Nausicaa, to be better, but man. Nothing compares to Sen to Chihiro. Sometimes when I'm watching it, it's like Chihiro is me.

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[info]yokozuki
2007-04-05 09:10 pm UTC (link)
Ugh. What I get for being so incoherent. (Ehehehe, incoherent comments are what YOU get when you make me incoherent? XDDD ahem. (but that's a good thing, right! well, should be, anyway...)) What I meant to say:
after her parents had fallen asleep.
The perfect evocation thing again. If that's not a word, forgive me. But the thing that trips me out is that I could just SEE all this, exactly as if it were a secret clip, and that IS precisely what her parents would do and that makes me laugh and want to sock them at the same time, and it just... all... fits so very smoothly with the movie. In characterization and atmosphere most shiningly. And you KICKED ASS at pinning in so few words such a depth. small, timid strides that still did not falter. That one kills me. Just kills me. That is everything right there. Daaamn. *mad teary grin*

*GLOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMPS!!*

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[info]yokozuki
2007-04-05 09:23 pm UTC (link)
Aaaah and I got so distracted by the wow, I forgot to mention, I did notice one thing that escaped your eye on read-over - The air leave her lungs in a whoosh

THANK YOU AGAIN. ...please forgive the extended caps abuse. XD *still in daze*

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[info]darcenciel
2007-04-06 01:14 am UTC (link)
XDDDDDDDDDDDDD well. I'm really glad you liked it!!!!!!!!! (ok understatement I am grinning stupidly)

And thanks for finding the typo...I am too lazy to login right now but I will fix it. *hug*

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[info]claim_solaris
2007-04-06 09:20 pm UTC (link)
It was beautiful, thanks for writing it and sharing! <3

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[info]darcenciel
2007-04-06 11:53 pm UTC (link)
You are welcome! ^_^

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